Personally, I liked the rush scene feeling. Shit happening is the best way for me to actually care about stories that I'm reading.
I liked it a lot.
Agree w/Dork about more vaginasex, though. Maybe patrick can blackmail the pukey bitch for sex? Just a possible plot line. Feel it out.
Edit: Christ...that took me 20 minutes to read? There are 2 replies when I open the thread, yet my reply is the 5th. What the fuck is this world coming to?
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