Ok, so the whole thing about staying awake or you die...
What I'm trying to get across is the mindset, which I believe a lot of people have these days, that yes, I (I being the reader) would seriously consider risking my life for _____ amount of money. The character of Vosh has a lot more at stake then just the 50 million dollar reward he's offering, but his motives are not yet known to the reader. Part of it is that in order for him to offer something so great the participants will have to offer something great too. If they weren't risking theif life then the story wouldn't be able to convey the sacrifice they're willing to make for money, which is kind of the heart of the story. It makes the stakes higher. I'm not quite sure yet if I'm going to try and keep this story as realistic as I am able to within the idea of the book, or if I'm going to lean more towards the absurdist kafkaesque style.
Keep the feedback coming though, this is good. Does the fact that they have to put their life on the lines really come off as out of place?
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