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ttbabe23 · 10-01-2003, 12:22 AM

I wrote this a few days ago and just wanted to share it with you all and see what you thought

Questions

How can you be cold?
What did I do to make you act this way?
All I asked was for you to get to know me.
I never said you had to fall for me the way I fell for you.
I acted like a fool,
And set myself up for the fall.
Not once, but twice.
I just pray that there will not be a third.
I want there to be something,
I just am not sure if I should give it the time.
The time to care and the time to share.
For the possibility of something happening,
Is yet unknown.
You made me smile,
You made me laugh.
You said I was sweet,
You said I was amazing.
You showed me new friends who liked me for me.
But yet why are you so far away?
I know that this is all so soon,
And that I need to take the time to get to know you.
But what shall I do in the time in between?
Shall I sit here and wonder if it is what it seems,
Or should I wonder if anything will happen at all?
Time you say?
How much time?
Will there be something at the end of that time?
I do not know,
Yet should I still care?
I feel so empty not knowing what to think.
Just don’t let me sink,
Sink into the pain and tears of yet more heartache.

Pliedes · 10-01-2003, 12:29 AM

Very simple.

At least you're putting your feelings to words though, thats always good for figuring things out.

Schroeder · 10-01-2003, 01:49 AM

Any time you can be proud of what you have done, that is something to celebrate. I like the simplicity of your poem yet the emotion it still manages to convey. Terrific.

Titan · 10-01-2003, 01:56 AM

He's a chauvisnistic pig. Don't give him another chance

Aside from that, I like this sexxion:

Quote:

Originally posted by ttbabe23:
Time you say?
How much time?
Will there be something at the end of that time?

Combat Chuck · 10-01-2003, 02:18 AM

Yeah, that part jumped out at me as well.

Good deal here. Nothing wrong with venting through verse....

StDx · 10-01-2003, 02:32 AM

It makes you sound sad, pathetic, and borderline illiterate.

ttbabe23 · 10-01-2003, 03:37 PM

Hey people get sad and pathetic sometimes... it happens I just asked what ya thought so

fat_retard · 10-01-2003, 07:46 PM

I'm sad and pathetic all the time, just ask my two imaginary friends.

Niger Angelus · 10-01-2003, 09:13 PM

Well, I had three. One of my friends got jealous and killed him.

silver and cold · 10-01-2003, 09:55 PM

I still have 7 and they are all sitting here with me, Malibu, and her 9 imaginary friends,
they are...Betsy, Fritzy, Fred, Sally, Ondo, Bobra, Calli, Henrietta, Carlito, Sanchez, Mario, Luigi, Jeffrey, Yoshi, Juan, and Yousahoemacafoosearoniandcheese(don't ask how to pronounce that we still don't know to this day.) -Mali
So yeah, is having imaginary friends when your 17 a bad thing?

ttbabe23 · 10-01-2003, 09:56 PM

i dunno about that one hun lol

Niger Angelus · 10-01-2003, 09:58 PM

Do you have nice round breats?

getupkids · 10-02-2003, 12:35 AM

HAHAHAHAHA are you talking to ttbabe?!

the_butcher · 10-02-2003, 12:42 AM

Poem: Sub-par.
Avatar: Gay.
Hate level for you: High.

Sorry ttbabe...wait, no I'm not.

VOL · 10-02-2003, 03:11 PM

[quote]Originally posted by Schroeder:
Any time you can be proud of what you have done, that is something to celebrate.

Finally Schroeder says something worth paying any mind to

ttbabe23 · 10-02-2003, 03:25 PM

true true....

Combat Chuck · 10-02-2003, 11:23 PM

Or just incredibly sappy.

the_butcher · 10-04-2003, 05:12 AM

I'm voting for the latter.

VOL · 10-04-2003, 03:29 PM

*agrees with butcher

Thomas Gander · 10-04-2003, 03:49 PM

The poem sucks and it sounds like you need to find a friend or two. Also, the poem is so boring, it either needs to have some rhyming or sound a little cooler. It doesn't sound like you could make it do either, so I would suggest just throwing the piece of shit away.

VOL · 10-04-2003, 03:53 PM

*changes mind and agrees with TG....

* thinks to self... "I don't know who the hell I want to agree with"

Combat Chuck · 10-04-2003, 06:35 PM

VOL, you're an idiot.

VOL · 10-04-2003, 07:19 PM

* agrees with combat chuck

Combat Chuck · 10-04-2003, 08:09 PM

*doesn't like patronizing

10-01-2003, 12:22 AM	#1 (permalink)
ttbabe23 Senior Member Join Date: Jul 2003 Location: Somewhere Over the Rainbow Posts: 147 Internets: 10	I wrote this a few days ago and just wanted to share it with you all and see what you thought Questions How can you be cold? What did I do to make you act this way? All I asked was for you to get to know me. I never said you had to fall for me the way I fell for you. I acted like a fool, And set myself up for the fall. Not once, but twice. I just pray that there will not be a third. I want there to be something, I just am not sure if I should give it the time. The time to care and the time to share. For the possibility of something happening, Is yet unknown. You made me smile, You made me laugh. You said I was sweet, You said I was amazing. You showed me new friends who liked me for me. But yet why are you so far away? I know that this is all so soon, And that I need to take the time to get to know you. But what shall I do in the time in between? Shall I sit here and wonder if it is what it seems, Or should I wonder if anything will happen at all? Time you say? How much time? Will there be something at the end of that time? I do not know, Yet should I still care? I feel so empty not knowing what to think. Just don’t let me sink, Sink into the pain and tears of yet more heartache.
	just do it ok...

10-01-2003, 03:37 PM	#7 (permalink)
ttbabe23 Senior Member Join Date: Jul 2003 Location: Somewhere Over the Rainbow Posts: 147 Internets: 10	Hey people get sad and pathetic sometimes... it happens I just asked what ya thought so
	just do it ok...

10-01-2003, 09:13 PM	#9 (permalink)
Niger Angelus We still believe. Join Date: Oct 2002 Location: Indiana Posts: 4,697 Internets: 216	Well, I had three. One of my friends got jealous and killed him.
	I enjoy knives and fire.

10-01-2003, 09:55 PM	#10 (permalink)
silver and cold Ish... Join Date: May 2003 Location: this nowhere Posts: 1,680 Internets: 10	I still have 7 and they are all sitting here with me, Malibu, and her 9 imaginary friends, they are...Betsy, Fritzy, Fred, Sally, Ondo, Bobra, Calli, Henrietta, Carlito, Sanchez, Mario, Luigi, Jeffrey, Yoshi, Juan, and Yousahoemacafoosearoniandcheese(don't ask how to pronounce that we still don't know to this day.) -Mali So yeah, is having imaginary friends when your 17 a bad thing?
	the killer in me is the killer in you.

10-01-2003, 09:56 PM	#11 (permalink)
ttbabe23 Senior Member Join Date: Jul 2003 Location: Somewhere Over the Rainbow Posts: 147 Internets: 10	i dunno about that one hun lol
	just do it ok...

10-01-2003, 12:29 AM	#2 (permalink)
Pliedes Senior Member Join Date: Oct 2002 Location: Puget Sound Posts: 4,594 Internets: 1608	Very simple. At least you're putting your feelings to words though, thats always good for figuring things out.

10-01-2003, 01:49 AM	#3 (permalink)
Schroeder Unwanted Join Date: Aug 2003 Posts: 1,543 Internets: -885	Any time you can be proud of what you have done, that is something to celebrate. I like the simplicity of your poem yet the emotion it still manages to convey. Terrific.

10-01-2003, 02:18 AM	#5 (permalink)
Combat Chuck Senior Member Join Date: Oct 2002 Posts: 2,063 Internets: 10	Yeah, that part jumped out at me as well. Good deal here. Nothing wrong with venting through verse....

10-01-2003, 02:32 AM	#6 (permalink)
StDx Senior Member Join Date: Feb 2002 Location: right behind you Posts: 931 Internets: 306	It makes you sound sad, pathetic, and borderline illiterate.

10-01-2003, 07:46 PM	#8 (permalink)
fat_retard Senior Member Join Date: May 2003 Location: a house Posts: 664 Internets: 10	I'm sad and pathetic all the time, just ask my two imaginary friends.

10-01-2003, 09:58 PM	#12 (permalink)
Niger Angelus We still believe. Join Date: Oct 2002 Location: Indiana Posts: 4,697 Internets: 216	Do you have nice round breats?
	I enjoy knives and fire.

10-02-2003, 12:35 AM	#13 (permalink)
getupkids Senior Member Join Date: Apr 2003 Location: warsaw Posts: 174 Internets: 10	HAHAHAHAHA are you talking to ttbabe?!
	according to the map, we've only got about 4 more inches to go

10-02-2003, 12:42 AM	#14 (permalink)
the_butcher Senior Member Join Date: Apr 2003 Location: ::: the recesses of my mind ::: Posts: 1,023 Internets: 10	Poem: Sub-par. Avatar: Gay. Hate level for you: High. Sorry ttbabe...wait, no I'm not.
	\| bite the bullet and swallow lead \|

10-02-2003, 03:11 PM	#15 (permalink)
VOL Senior Member Join Date: Aug 2003 Location: there Posts: 2,305 Internets: -205	[quote]Originally posted by Schroeder: Any time you can be proud of what you have done, that is something to celebrate. Finally Schroeder says something worth paying any mind to
	~ductor ab grandis divinitus~ CDXXVII

10-02-2003, 03:25 PM	#16 (permalink)
ttbabe23 Senior Member Join Date: Jul 2003 Location: Somewhere Over the Rainbow Posts: 147 Internets: 10	true true....
	just do it ok...

10-02-2003, 11:23 PM	#17 (permalink)
Combat Chuck Senior Member Join Date: Oct 2002 Posts: 2,063 Internets: 10	Or just incredibly sappy.

10-04-2003, 05:12 AM	#18 (permalink)
the_butcher Senior Member Join Date: Apr 2003 Location: ::: the recesses of my mind ::: Posts: 1,023 Internets: 10	I'm voting for the latter.
	\| bite the bullet and swallow lead \|

10-04-2003, 03:29 PM	#19 (permalink)
VOL Senior Member Join Date: Aug 2003 Location: there Posts: 2,305 Internets: -205	*agrees with butcher
	~ductor ab grandis divinitus~ CDXXVII

10-04-2003, 03:49 PM	#20 (permalink)
Thomas Gander Member Join Date: Nov 2002 Location: India Posts: 48 Internets: 10	The poem sucks and it sounds like you need to find a friend or two. Also, the poem is so boring, it either needs to have some rhyming or sound a little cooler. It doesn't sound like you could make it do either, so I would suggest just throwing the piece of shit away.

10-04-2003, 03:53 PM	#21 (permalink)
VOL Senior Member Join Date: Aug 2003 Location: there Posts: 2,305 Internets: -205	changes mind and agrees with TG.... thinks to self... "I don't know who the hell I want to agree with"
	~ductor ab grandis divinitus~ CDXXVII

10-04-2003, 06:35 PM	#22 (permalink)
Combat Chuck Senior Member Join Date: Oct 2002 Posts: 2,063 Internets: 10	VOL, you're an idiot.

10-04-2003, 07:19 PM	#23 (permalink)
VOL Senior Member Join Date: Aug 2003 Location: there Posts: 2,305 Internets: -205	* agrees with combat chuck
	~ductor ab grandis divinitus~ CDXXVII

10-04-2003, 08:09 PM	#24 (permalink)
Combat Chuck Senior Member Join Date: Oct 2002 Posts: 2,063 Internets: 10	*doesn't like patronizing

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